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Brdar
Senior Member
Bosnia and Herzegovina
2770 Posts
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delboj
stripovi.com suradnik
Bosnia and Herzegovina
17014 Posts
Member since 01/03/2004 |
Posted - 19/01/2015 : 14:06:13
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Potrudi se malo oko pravopisa. Kad dolazim ovdje? Pa u sljedećoj rečenici stavio si kako treba "ovamo dolazim". I treba ovog puta, ne ovaj put. I pripazi oko upotrijebe prijedloga s. |
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Tintilinic
Senior Member
2955 Posts
Member since 15/07/2013 |
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Brdar
Senior Member
Bosnia and Herzegovina
2770 Posts
Member since 22/10/2003 |
Posted - 19/01/2015 : 15:30:17
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quote: Originally posted by delboj
Potrudi se malo oko pravopisa. Kad dolazim ovdje? Pa u sljedećoj rečenici stavio si kako treba "ovamo dolazim". I treba ovog puta, ne ovaj put. I pripazi oko upotrijebe prijedloga s.
Ispravljeno, hvala na savjetima. |
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King Warrior
stripovi.com suradnik
22315 Posts
Member since 10/11/2007 |
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Humbert Coe
Average Member
Croatia
592 Posts
Member since 17/02/2005 |
Posted - 19/01/2015 : 16:50:17
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quote: Originally posted by delboj
Potrudi se malo oko pravopisa. Kad dolazim ovdje? Pa u sljedećoj rečenici stavio si kako treba "ovamo dolazim". I treba ovog puta, ne ovaj put. I pripazi oko upotrijebe prijedloga s.
Ispravno je i ovaj put i ovoga puta. Radi se o vremenskom akuzativu i genitivu. Prošli put - prošloga puta, svaki dan - svakoga dana i sl.
I upotrijebe = upotrebe.
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Boston Jack
stripovi.com suradnik
166 Posts
Member since 26/05/2010 |
Posted - 19/01/2015 : 21:25:00
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Sviđa mi se jako tema i atmosfera u stripu. Nadam se da će nastaviti ići u tom smjeru, bez skretanja u geg, ili parodiju. |
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ned_lynx
Senior Member
2340 Posts
Member since 06/08/2005 |
Posted - 23/01/2015 : 02:41:38
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Da mi se ne dopada, ne bih ni komentarisao odlične table, ali; zar ne misliš da bi narativ bio efektniji da je pod crnom?
I, pritom, beli font. |
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Brdar
Senior Member
Bosnia and Herzegovina
2770 Posts
Member since 22/10/2003 |
Posted - 23/01/2015 : 16:49:37
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Hvala svima za savjete, podrsku, komentare, pracenje.
@ Boston Jack - nije geg ni parodija, ali bice svega u ovoj prici.
@ ned_lynx - prijedlog o narativu prihvacen u potpunosti, hvala lijepo (prve tri table uredit cu u narednim danima).
Idemo dalje, tabla 4.
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Edited by - Brdar on 25/05/2015 19:32:36 |
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markotamara
Senior Member
Croatia
2783 Posts
Member since 26/05/2013 |
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Brdar
Senior Member
Bosnia and Herzegovina
2770 Posts
Member since 22/10/2003 |
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Tintilinic
Senior Member
2955 Posts
Member since 15/07/2013 |
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ned_lynx
Senior Member
2340 Posts
Member since 06/08/2005 |
Posted - 24/01/2015 : 02:51:26
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Isprva mi je Sky full of stars išlo na, khm, strpljenje, no, kako strip ide, valjda je to potreban kontrast.
Očito se lik suočava sa mračnim mislima koje roji, a vukodlak je, možebitno, tek prva stepenica.
A možda i ne!
Svejedno, pratim pomno!
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Brdar
Senior Member
Bosnia and Herzegovina
2770 Posts
Member since 22/10/2003 |
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Brdar
Senior Member
Bosnia and Herzegovina
2770 Posts
Member since 22/10/2003 |
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Brdar
Senior Member
Bosnia and Herzegovina
2770 Posts
Member since 22/10/2003 |
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ned_lynx
Senior Member
2340 Posts
Member since 06/08/2005 |
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Brdar
Senior Member
Bosnia and Herzegovina
2770 Posts
Member since 22/10/2003 |
Posted - 12/02/2015 : 20:49:42
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quote: Originally posted by ned_lynx
Slanje avatara u transcedenciju?!
Bar ja to tako videh.
Sjajno!
Da, to je to. Drago mi je da ti se sviđa. |
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Brdar
Senior Member
Bosnia and Herzegovina
2770 Posts
Member since 22/10/2003 |
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ned_lynx
Senior Member
2340 Posts
Member since 06/08/2005 |
Posted - 13/02/2015 : 02:49:00
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Prosto je višak konstatacija da "Mašta može svašta" sa table broj pet, a to se, još nepotrebnije, ponavlja u tabli #7. To mi toliko smeta i odvlači pažnju da prosto moram da reagujem sledećim pitanjem:
Da li postoji razlog zašto je to tako, a meni je, eto, nevidljiv? |
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King Warrior
stripovi.com suradnik
22315 Posts
Member since 10/11/2007 |
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PijaniPatak
stripovi.com suradnik
Germany
10035 Posts
Member since 20/02/2010 |
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Brdar
Senior Member
Bosnia and Herzegovina
2770 Posts
Member since 22/10/2003 |
Posted - 13/02/2015 : 15:17:26
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Hvala svima za pracenje stripa, komentare, sugestije, pohvale.
Naravno da postoji razlog zasto naglasavam da ''masta moze svasta'' i to ce biti obrazlozeno nesto kasnije u toku price. |
Edited by - Brdar on 13/02/2015 15:18:01 |
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Brdar
Senior Member
Bosnia and Herzegovina
2770 Posts
Member since 22/10/2003 |
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Brdar
Senior Member
Bosnia and Herzegovina
2770 Posts
Member since 22/10/2003 |
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ned_lynx
Senior Member
2340 Posts
Member since 06/08/2005 |
Posted - 21/02/2015 : 03:14:54
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Upečatljivo je dočarana teskoba i mračnjaštvo, a kasnije i jezovitost ambijenta i (mogućih) privida i/ili pojava; pritom je, skoro svaka tabla, klifhenger.
Vr.
Jedva čekam dalje! |
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